This is just MY opinion ( and you know what they say about opinions

) I wouldn't have considered this spam or dumped it for being poorly written. Its short, to the point, and descriptive.
Try to remember that not every submission is coming from a professional SEO or Directory Submission company. Many submissions are coming from every day 'joe shmoes' who do their best with the knowledge and education they have.
I am interested though on what you think would be a better description for this submission. Or maybe what would get it approved.